"The Moment" Draft #2

Your project for today's class is to re-draft your Moment.  Keeping in mind yesterday's mini lesson on "Show Don't Tell" and "VAKS-ing", you are going to be word processing your Moment, and adding one section that illustrates "Show Don't Tell" writing.  Remember that "Show Don't Tell" usually includes some VAKS'ing in order to paint the picture for your readers. 

Moment Format:

- Start with setting the scene (when, where)
- Tell the story with at least one length segment of "show Don't Tell" (6+ sentences in length)
- End with the "message" or moral of the story.  What did you learn? What do you want your reader's to learn?